POWER ENGLISH

현재위치

> 영작교정 첨삭 서비스

What's good about the place where you were born?

김예린/2024-08-12

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

I was born in Seoul, but I've been live in illsan. So I want to say good things about illsan. First there are many parks and lakes that I can walk around. Especially the lake park named 일산호수공원 is best for me. Because i feel calm and refreshing whenever I walk there. Second I love a library near my house. That library is special for flower. So everyone can read lots of book regarding to flower. Also I like the space to read book. Lastly illsan is safe for me. I live here whole of my life. So atmosphere is good to me and l like the scent of here.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi, Lin!

Thank you for doing your homework. Have a good night!

~T. Divina^^

Here are some corrections:

1. I was born in Seoul, but I've been live in Illsan.

>>I was born in Seoul, but I've been living in Illsan ever since.

2. So, I want to say good things about Illsan.

>>CORRECT!

3. First there are many parks and lakes that I can walk around. Especially the lake park named 일산호수공원 is best for me.

>>First, there are many parks and lakes that I can walk around. The lake park named 일산호수공원 is especially the best for me.

4. Because i feel calm and refreshing whenever I walk there.

>>I feel calm and refreshed whenever I walk there.

5. Second I love a library near my house.

>>Second, I love this library near my house.

6. That library is special for flower. So everyone can read lots of book regarding to flower.

>>This library specializes in flowers so everyone can read lots of books regarding flowers.

7. Also I like the space to read book.

>>Also, I like the space to read a book.

8. Lastly Illsan is safe for me.

>> Lastly, Illsan is safe for me.

9. I live here whole of my life. So atmosphere is good to me and l like the scent of here.

>>I have lived here my whole life, so the atmosphere is good for me. l also like the scent here.