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Many interesting ability of animals

박준현/2024-08-09

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
In earth, there is many organisms. And they have many ability. Like Golden Retriever, a bomb dust bug. Golden Retriever is cleverest dog in earth. They are announcement a blind persons. And they can swim very well. Why they can swim well more than another dogs? Because the Golden Retriever has webbed feet. And its help to swim fast. A bomb dust bug is very unique bug in the world. They are little terrorist in bug's world. If something give threat, and they explosion some special gas for they're hip. If some bug sniff the gas, and bug die. In the world, many other organisms has unique ability. Let's founds other unique ability they have!
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hello, John! Those are some fun and interesting facts~ Thank you for sharing. I heard them all for the first time!
-T. Sonny
In earth, there is many organisms. 
>>On Earth, there are many organisms.
And they have many ability. 
>>They have many abilities.
Like Golden Retriever, a bomb dust bug. 
>Some of them are the Golden Retriever and the bomb dust bug.
Golden Retriever is cleverest dog in earth. 
>>The Golden Retriever is the most clever dog on Earth.
They are announcement a blind persons. 
>>They can detect blind people.
And they can swim very well. 
>>They can swim well, too.
Why they can swim well more than another dogs? 
>>Why can  they swim well more than other dogs?
Because the Golden Retriever has webbed feet. 
>>It's because the Golden Retriever has webbed feet.
And its help to swim fast. 
>>Those help them swim fast.
A bomb dust bug is very unique bug in the world. 
>>A bomb dust bug is a very unique bug in the world.
They are little terrorist in bug's world. 
>>They are like little terrorists in a bug's world. 
If something give threat, and they explosion some special gas for they're hip. 
>>If something threatens them, they emit some special gas from their abdomen.
If some bug sniff the gas, and bug die.
>>Any bug who sniffs it, dies.
In the world, many other organisms has unique ability. 
>>In the world, many other organisms has unique abilities.
Let's founds other unique ability they have!
>>Let's find more unique abilities they have!
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