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What's the worst experience you've had in your hometown?

임주미/2024-08-09

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
20 years ago, happened terrible accident at my hometown.it called Daegu subway fire accident. Then many people died and hurt ,It remained huge injury to most Korean people
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hi, Ju Mi! I searched for information about this accident on the internet after reading your homework. It was a very traumatizing event for Koreans. TT Anyway, thank you for being diligent in doing your homework. Happy weekend!^^
~ T. Jewel
20 years ago, happened terrible accident at my hometown.
>>20 years ago, a terrible accident happened in my hometown.
it called Daegu subway fire accident.
>>It is called the Daegu subway fire accident.
Then many people died and hurt ,
>>Many people died and were injured.
It remained huge injury to most Korean people.
>>It caused significant trauma to many Koreans.
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