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Describe your kindergarten graduation what did you wear and how was your graduation?

차진혁/2024-08-06

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I wore graduation gown at kindergarten graduation, the gown was navy and white. And I sang group QUEEN's song and danced. I feel excited because kindergarten course finish and a new school life begins. My mom cried.
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Here's your revised composition homework, Jimmy. I appreciate your sending it. Please go over the revisions given below.


Cheers,
Jean~~



                                     

                              Describe your kindergarten graduation what did you wear and how was your graduation?


I wore graduation gown at kindergarten graduation, the gown was navy and white.
>> I wore a graduation gown at kindergarten graduation; the gown was navy and white.

And I sang group QUEEN's song and danced.
>>  And my class sang the band Queen’s song and danced to it. 

I feel excited because kindergarten course finish and a new school life begins.
>> I felt excited because my kindergarten course was finished and a new school life was about to begin. 

My mom cried.
>> CORRECT ~~
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