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Would you like to go travelling for a few years non-stop?

최유정/2024-08-06

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

Definitely, without second thought, it's yes. Travelling is a blast. If I could earn my living or had no problem with money, I would definitely do that even though I'm not as strong as I was before. It must be tough and tiring if we keep on traveling without being home. However, traveling was the one that motivated me to work and study English. On top of that, there are expected positive outcomes. It'll broaden our perspectives by living in various countries and being exposed to different environments and cultures. So I'll certainly start packing if I don't need to worry about money.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi, Yu Jeong! Thank you for sharing your thoughts! I completely agree that traveling can be incredibly enriching and motivating. It’s great to hear how it has inspired you to work and study English. Hoping you'll be able to travel non-stop in the future.

~T. Jenna

Definitely, without second thought, it's yes.

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>>Certainly, without a doubt, the answer is affirmative.

Travelling is a blast.

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>>Traveling is an exhilarating experience.

If I could earn my living or had no problem with money, I would definitely do that even though I'm not as strong as I was before.

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>> I could earn my living or had no financial concerns, I would definitely pursue that, even though I am not as strong as I once was.

>>If I were financially secure or had no money worries, I would definitely pursue that, even though I'm not as strong as I used to be.

It must be tough and tiring if we keep on traveling without being home.

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>>It must be tough and tiring to keep traveling without returning home.

>>It must be challenging and exhausting to continue traveling without a return home.

However, traveling was the one that motivated me to work and study English.

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>>However, traveling was the spark that fueled my drive to work and study English.

On top of that, there are expected positive outcomes.

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>>What's more, there are anticipated benefits to be gained.

It'll broaden our perspectives by living in various countries and being exposed to different environments and cultures.

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>>It would broaden my perspective by allowing me to live in various countries and be exposed to different environments and cultures.

>>It would significantly expand my horizons by immersing me in diverse countries and exposing me to a wide range of environments and cultures.

So I'll certainly start packing if I don't need to worry about money.

>>So, I will certainly start packing if I don’t need to worry about money.

>>So, I’ll definitely hit the road for continuous trips if money isn’t a concern.