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Aside from financial reasons, why do we need to have a job?

이지윤/2024-08-05

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HAHAHA.... My answer is too long..... Check the attached file, please. Have nice a day!

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Hello, Yun!

Do not be concerned if you make a long composition, that is preferable so you can optimize your writing practice.^__^ Keep doing a good homework~

Chammy

There are many reasons. But I think big three reasons.

>> There are numerous reasons but I think of 3 major reasons.

First, because of the social atmosphere.

In Korea, people have a clear set of things to do for each age, and if they are not doing what they have to do, they are viewed as strangers or as losers.

>>People in Korea have specific tasks for every age bracket, and if they do not complete them, they are considered strangers or losers.

Moreover, most Koreans think that after graduating from university, men or women should have a job and they think that's natural.

That's why more people have jobs because they don't want to be useless people and avoid negative perceptions.

Second, for personal challenges and objectives.

>>Correct

The meaning of having job means sociala life, and as people have jobs, they can try personal challenges and other objectives may araise.

>>The meaning of having a job means social life, and as people have jobs, they can try personal challenges and other objectives that may arise.

>>The term "job" refers to a social life, and because people have work, they can try personal difficulties and pursue other goals.

So, a job can be used as a method to perform everything.

>>Correct

In addition, according to the psycologist Maslow's hierarchy of needs theory, since the need for self-actualization is the highest desire, human instinctively strives for self-realization and self-satisfaction, so people naturally have jobs.

>> In addition, according to the psychologist Maslow's hierarchy of needs theory, since the need for self-actualization is the highest desire, human instinctively strives for self-realization and self-satisfaction, so people naturally have jobs.

Third, to live as an independent being.

>>Correct

Humans can't rely on their parents until they die, so they have to be independent on day.

>>Humans can't rely on their parents until they die, so they have to be independent one day.

In addition to economic independence, mental independence must be achieved, but in order to be independent of their parents and live as an independent entity in society, people have to have jobs.

>>Correct