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김순님/2024-08-01

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My country is supporting to people who work kind of agriculture. Farming industry is good way to develop the countryside. But most of benefit from the production takes businessman not farmer. So government should help farmers to make the money. Marketing system needs to be involved by government. I think supporting money to farmers is waste of taxes.
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Hi Ms. Sunny!
Did you know that one of the best jobs is being a farmer? Without a farmer, there will be no food on the table. No wonder the government gives support to them especially nowadays since the young generation is no longer interested in farming and we cannot rely everything to AI.
Thank you for this!
Aki

My country is supporting to people who work kind of agriculture.
>>> My country is supporting people who work kind of agriculture.

Farming industry is good way to develop the countryside.
>>> The farming industry is a good way to develop the countryside.

But most of benefit from the production takes businessman not farmer.
>>> But most of the benefit from the production takes businessman not farmer.
 
So government should help farmers to make the money.
>> So the government should help farmers to make money.

Marketing system needs to be involved by government.
>>> The marketing system needs to be involved by the government.

I think supporting money to farmers is waste of taxes.
>>>  I think supporting money to farmers is a waste of taxes.
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