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When i was eight years old, I had play the piano and go academy for 10 years. Playing piano is so exciting but when i watch a guitar player video, The guitar looks cooler. So i bought a guitar 6 month ago, but i can't play the guitar well. Because I don't have a much time for learn. My goal is to play three guitar songs this year. These days, there are many different method for learn instrument. I think that Learning in the academy is best. But It is expensive and need a lot of travel time. So I chose a youtube. There are many teacher in youtube platform and so nice. choosing how to learn is important but Practicing stedily is more important for imporve ability.
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Great work, Jun! Please focus on expanding your vocabulary and varying sentence lengths in your writing.
- Teacher Angela


When i was eight years old, I had play the piano and go academy for 10 years.
>> When I was eight years old, I played the piano and went to an academy for 10 years.

Playing piano is so exciting but when i watch a guitar player video, The guitar looks cooler.
>> Playing the piano is exciting, but when I watch a guitar player's video, the guitar looks cooler

So i bought a guitar 6 month ago, but i can't play the guitar well. Because I don't have a much time for learn.
>> So, I bought a guitar six months ago, but I can't play it well because I don't have much time to learn.

My goal is to play three guitar songs this year. These days, there are many different method for learn instrument. 
>> My goal is to play three guitar songs this year. These days, there are many different methods in learning an instrument.

I think that Learning in the academy is best. But It is expensive and need a lot of travel time. 
>> I think that learning at an academy is the best option, but it is expensive and requires a lot of travel time

So I chose a youtube. There are many teacher in youtube platform and so nice.
>> So, I chose YouTube. There are many teachers on the YouTube platform, and they are very good.

choosing how to learn is important but Practicing stedily is more important for imporve ability.
>> Choosing how to learn is important, but practicing steadily is more important for improving your ability