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What is your greatest fear in life?

이지윤/2024-07-31

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Hello, Yun!

You share a lot even though you can only share 1 experience ^___^ I am so happy to read your composition which I believe was composed in full effort ~ Keep it up^^

Chammy

I haven't lived a long life yet, but I think I had three experiences about greatest fear in life.

>>I haven't lived a long life yet, but I think I had three experiences with greatest fear in life.

First, first things I've been through in something. It's scary to experience things that I haven't experienced in life.

>> First, I've gone through something. It's scary to try something I've never done before.

For example, it means having a university entrance interview or an interview with a big company.

Even the same interview seems to have had the biggest impact because the method, people, and pressure are different.

Second, it's about the hospital.

>>Correct

I have experienced three car accident, but I haven't had much surgery in my life.

>>I have experienced three car accidents, but I haven't had much surgery in my life

When I had my wisdom tooth removed, I had surgery because of tonsil stones, and it was very scary to anesthetize, and it came as a great fear to put a knife on my body.

>>When I had my wisdom tooth extracted due to tonsil stones, I underwent surgery, and it was terrifying to be anesthetized, and it was terrifying to have a knife placed on my body.

In addition to this experience, it was also a great fear to hear that someone in the family was in the hospital.

There was a time when my father was suddenly hospitalized. During the medical check, a tumor was found in the lungs, and although it was not cancer, it needed to be removed, so he was hospitalized for surgery.

>>Correct

I had an experience of being so surprised by the story of being hospitalized without knowing anything.

>>I was surprised by the story of being hospitalized without knowing anything.

Third, it's a sudden death.

We have experienced the sudden death of our husband of mother's second younger sister.

I was embarrassed, and so shocked, and it was a memory I didn't want to remember because adults cried so much. So, the third experience is one I don't want to go through again.

>>Correct