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권경희/2024-07-31

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I don't have any hereditary special skills in archery. There are only exist fortitude mineset and scienctific trainning course. I worry about about the advance of China in all the fields. China is an immoral and dangerous country. It is poisonous in the world that their population are too many and economic growth are too rapid .
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Hello Ms. Lily!
I understand your point. I guess China take everything seriously and competitively. 
When will they change?
Thank you anyway for writing your thoughts. Have a great day ahead.
Aki~

I don't have any hereditary special skills in archery.
>>>  I don't have any hereditary skills in archery.

There are only exist fortitude mineset and scienctific trainning course.
>>  Their solely the result of fortitude mindset and scientific training.

I worry about about the advance of China in all the fields.
>>>  I am concerned about China's advances in various fields. The rapid economic growth and large population pose significant challenges. 

China is an immoral and dangerous country. It is poisonous in the world that their population are too many and economic growth are too rapid 
>>> Additionally, China's actions on the global stage raise ethical and security concerns."
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