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The musical instruments I can play

김창민/2024-07-30

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First, I can play recorder. Most of Koreans who are same age as me learned how to play recorder in school. And second, I can play piano. I learned how to play piano from 5 to 11 years old. It's been so long since I played this instrument that I'm not good at playing those now. But if I get a chance to learn how to play musical instruments, I want to learn playing piano again.

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Hi there Min!

Learning to play a musical instrument can enhance verbal memory, spatial reasoning and literacy skills. These are only a few of the benefits of playing a musical instrument.

In your country, according to many students, playing the recorder is one requirement for students. Fundamentally, you learned to play notes that you read from a musical piece. Anyway, the piano is a different instrument and it requires a different level of skill. If you have the passion but have limited time to practice, you can always listen to your favorite musical piece for inspiration.

Thank you for this very good composition! The use of the determiner 'the' is important in describing a musical instrument like the guitar, the violin, the cello, among others. Also, always make your pronouns agree with your nouns.

Well done!

See you tomorrow.

-T. Donna~

First, I can play recorder. Most of Koreans who are same age as me learned how to play recorder in school.

>> First, I can play the recorder. Most of Koreans who are the same age as me learned how to play the recorder in school.

And second, I can play piano. I learned how to play piano from 5 to 11 years old.

>> And second, I can play the piano. I learned how to play the piano from 5 to 11 years old.

It's been so long since I played this instrument that I'm not good at playing those now.

>> It's been so long since I played these instruments that I'm not good at playing those now.

But if I get a chance to learn how to play musical instruments, I want to learn playing piano again.

>> But if I get a chance to learn how to play musical instruments, I want to learn playing the piano again.