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문병훈/2024-07-29

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Traveleing will be gain a lot of good experience that another countries culture and life. so people can have a wide view. Also, It give us recharging and relaxing so People would be spend their’s life activating and enjoying.
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Hello, Mr. Moon~
Now I know clearly why you have booked several travel destinations this year because you want to live life to the fullest. I must say that you deserve that happiness after working hardly for 31 years ~
Chammy
Traveleing will be gain a lot of good experience that another countries culture and life. so people can have a wide view.
>> Traveling will give you a lot of good experiences of another country's culture and life, so people can have a wide view.
Also, It give us recharging and relaxing so People would be spend their’s life activating and enjoying.
>> It also helps us refresh and relax, allowing us to live our lives more actively and enjoyably.
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