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권경희/2024-07-26

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I surprised that his anslasis is very sharp, insight and valid. I agree totally his opinions. We are ignoring the advantages of Confucianism like polite manners, respect, and mental values. While we only pursue materialism and bluff like social position, wealth, jobs that only get a lots of money. This is problem that these perceptions are social general peception in Korea.

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Hi, Ms. Lily!

Then is it a subjective or objective opinion? Or could be both?

We can talk about it later. Thank you for this. Have a great day ahead.

Aki~

I surprised that his anslasis is very sharp, insight and valid. I agree totally his opinions.

>>> I am surprised that his analysis is very sharp, insightful, and valid. I agree with his opinions.

We are ignoring the advantages of Confucianism like polite manners, respect, and mental values.

>>> CORRECT!

While we only pursue materialism and bluff like social position, wealth, jobs that only get a lots of money.

>>> We only pursue materialism and bluff like social position, wealth, and jobs that only get a lot of money.

This is problem that these perceptions are social general peception in Korea.

>>> This is the problem that these perceptions are social general perceptions in Korea.