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What are some health problems you have/had?

문도현/2024-07-24

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
A few months ago, I felt pain in my right stomach. But now, It's OK. I think that the best issue of my health is body weight. I getting fat while care my children and work my job. Also, Doing not golf practice anymore. My body weight was getting too much.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hi, Mun!

Thank you for doing your homework. Always take good care of your health!

~T. Divina^^

Here are some considerations:

1. A few months ago, I felt pain in my right stomach.  But now, It's OK. 
>>A few months ago, I felt some pain in my right stomach, but I'm okay now.

2. I think that the best issue of my health is body weight. 
>>I think that the best issue regarding my health is body weight. 

3. I getting fat while care my children and work my job. 
>>I got fat while caring for my children and working at my job. 

4. Also, Doing not golf practice anymore. 
>>Also, I stopped doing golf practice anymore.

5. My body weight was getting too much.
>>My body weight was too much.
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