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김순님/2024-07-24

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There are many kind of way to deal with stress . Some people do drinking,chatting,eating ,exercising and traveling. I agree with that kind of method. I don't like people who get angry with others because their stress. I think the best way of dealing with stress is chatting with their friends. Sometimes it could help your stress released .
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Ms. Sunny!
Yes, there are many ways how to deal with our stress and we need to be cautious about it. For me, the best way is to do exercise. it's free and healthy.
Have a good day!
Aki~

There are many kind of way to deal with stress.
>>> There are many ways to deal with stress.

Some people do drinking,chatting,eating ,exercising and traveling.
>>> Some people drink, chat, eat, exercise, and travel.

I agree with that kind of method.
>>> CORRECT!

I don't like people who get angry with others because their stress.
>>> I don't like people who get angry with others because of their stress.

I think the best way of dealing with stress is chatting with their friends.
>>> CORRECT!

Sometimes it could help your stress release.
>>> CORRECT!
OR >>> Sometimes it help release our stress.
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