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If you could have it your way, where would you like to go on your next vacation?

정하윤/2024-07-23

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I want to go to Hawaii. Bacause when i was young, my first abroad trip was Hawaii. And i had a lots of good memories in there. Snorkeling and coconut crab was my best memories. So i would like to go to Hawaii on my next vacation.

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Thank you for this Elizabeth!

I want to go to Hawaii.

>>> correct

Bacause when i was young, my first abroad trip was Hawaii. And i had a lots of good memories in there.

>>> Because when I was young, my first abroad trip was in Hawaii and I had lots of good memories in there.

Snorkeling and coconut crab was my best memories.

>>> Snorkeling and coconut crab were my best memories.

So I would like to go to Hawaii on my next vacation.

>>> correct