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ȸ ÷ֽ ۹Hi Eva,
Great job on your homework! It
sounds like you have many fun hobbies. Exercise, dancing, swimming, and
traveling are all wonderful ways to stay active and enjoy life. Your power
aerobics class sounds exciting, and traveling three or four times a year must be
very interesting. It must be wonderful to have the freedom to explore and do
what you love after retirement. And although you do write well, here are a few
tips for you to improve. First, check spelling and grammar to ensure words are
spelled correctly and proper grammar is used. For example, "hobby"
instead of "habby," and "already" instead of
"aleady." Use complete sentences with a subject and a verb, like
"Every day I go to the fitness center and take a power aerobics class for
one hour." Stay consistent with tenses, such as "Last month, I went
on a trip to a foreign country" instead of "Last month I went to trip
to foreign country." Finally, organize your thoughts by grouping similar
ideas together, such as discussing your exercise hobbies in one part and your
travel experiences in another.
Keep enjoying your hobbies and
exploring new activities!
I have
a lot of habby.
>>I
have a lot of hobbies.
I like
exercise, dance, swimming and watch you tuve.
>>I
like to exercise, dance, swim and watch YouTube.
Also I
like traveling.
>>Also,
I like traveling.
Avery
day I go to fitness center take a powerrobics class for one hour.
>>Every
day, I go to the fitness center to take a power aerobics class for one hour.
This
class very exciting.
>>This
class is very exciting.
Some
times go swimming pool.
>>Sometimes
I go to the swimming pool.
Last
month i went to trip to foreign country.
>>I
went to a foreign country last month.
I have
the plan travel three or four times a year.
>>I
plan to travel three or four times a year.
Because
I aleady retired so I am free. Hahaha
>>Because
I am already retired so I am free. Hahaha