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이상도/2024-07-21

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HOMEWORK What do you think of racism? Should people discriminate against other people due to their skin color? Racism should be banned. Our society should not be ranked by race, but by ability. I think racism is the dumbest thing we can do, and it's a chain of hate.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Good morning, Mr. Lee!
Hi, I was captivated by your last sentence, "chain of hate" 
Truly if no one breaks this inside the family, it would keep going. You know that values are taught and learned at home right,? if parents would teach their kids about "Acceptance" it won't be a problem when they stepped out of their doorway.
have a great day!
T. Aki~


Racism should be banned.
>> CORRECT!
OR >>> Racism should be stopped.

Our society should not be ranked by race but by ability.
>> CORRECT!

I think racism is the dumbest thing we can do, and it's a chain of hate.
>> CORRECT!

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