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Busan as a good vacation place in Korea.

강혜수/2024-07-19

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I recommend Busan as a good vacation place in Korea. Busan has a lot of interesting places and delicious food for visitors. Because Busan is ocean city, you can swim in the sea, even if you can’t swim, looking at the ocean view is nice. Furthermore, you can eat various seafood. especially, I recommend eating clams. even if you’re not near the sea, nightlife of Busan is also good. Busan has many famous clubs and cafes on SNS. So, swimming in the daytime, eating clams, enjoying party in the night will be the best plan in Busan,

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Hello, Iris!

I've heard a lot about Busan. There are a lot of activities to do there, so there isn't a day of being bored as a tourist.

~ Trixia

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I recommend Busan as a good vacation place in Korea.

- I recommend Busan as a good vacation place in Korea.

Busan has a lot of interesting places and delicious food for visitors.

- Busan has a lot of interesting places and delicious food for visitors.

Because Busan is ocean city, you can swim in the sea,

- Because Busan is an ocean city, you can swim in the sea.

even if you can’t swim, looking at the ocean view is nice.

- Even if you can’t swim, looking at the ocean view is nice.

Furthermore, you can eat various seafood.

- Furthermore, you can eat a variety of seafood.

especially, I recommend eating clams.

- I especially recommend eating clams.

even if you’re not near the sea, nightlife of Busan is also good.

- Even if you’re not near the sea, the nightlife in Busan is also good.

Busan has many famous clubs and cafes on SNS.

- Busan has many famous clubs and cafes on SNS.

So, swimming in the daytime, eating clams, enjoying party in the night will be the best plan in Busan,

- So, swimming in the daytime, eating clams, and enjoying parties at night will be the best plans in Busan.