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심미진/2024-07-18

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Korean companies are similar to military life. If you're unlucky, your boss always give you hard work. You have to obey them. And if you're not satisfied with it, you're in big trouble. they don't respect younger people opinion. and you should work very low salary The employment rate is getting higher these days. What's interesting is that more and more people are quitting. because many people feel hard to adjust in their work .You shouldn't force the younger generation to do everything for the company all the time. I hate it, bosses should always think Employees' leisure and health.but they only think company profit

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Hello again, Mi Jin!

I'm sending you back your revised composition from yesterday's homework. I apprecaite your sending it. Please go over the corrections and alternative expressions provided. Enjoy the rest of your evening!

Cheers,

Jean~~

What are your thoughts on the Korean work culture?

Korean companies are similar to military life.

>> CORRECT~~

If you're unlucky, your boss always give you hard work. You have to obey them.

>> If you're unlucky, your boss always gives you a difficult job and you have to obey his/her orders or demands.

And if you're not satisfied with it, you're in big trouble.

>> And if the boss isn't satisfied with your work, you're in big trouble.

they don't respect younger people opinion. and you should work very low salary

>> They don't respect younger people's opinions and the salary is very low.

The employment rate is getting higher these days. What's interesting is that more and more people are quitting. because many people feel hard to adjust in their work .

>> The employment rate is getting higher these days but what's interesting is that more and more people are quitting their jobs because many of them find it hard to adjust to their work.

You shouldn't force the younger generation to do everything for the company all the time.

>> The younger generation shouldn't be forced to do everything for the company all the time.

I hate it, bosses should always think Employees' leisure and health.but they only think company profit

>> I hate bosses who put company profit over employees' leisure and health.