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Is learning something new a waste of time?
김영순/2024-07-17
회원님의 올려주신 영작문
I think,learning something new is valuable in life.
If people enjoy learning new things,they are trying to improve their life.
Their brain will not be older than other people.
Learning whatever they do, seems to give people energy.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hi Young Soon!
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I know you can work on it.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon>> I think learning something new is valuable in life.
If people enjoy learning new things,they are trying to improve their life.
If people enjoy learning new things,they are trying to improve their life.
>> If people enjoy learning new things, they would be able to improve their life.
Their brain will not be older than other people.
Their brain will not be older than other people.
>> Their brain will remain active and therefore, they will stay sharp.
Learning whatever they do, seems to give people energy.
Learning whatever they do, seems to give people energy.
>> Learning in whatever they do seems to give people energy.
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