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It can't be called sport without safety.

임성준/2024-09-23

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In your opinion, what do you think is the most dangerous sport? >>> I think, the most dangerous sport is one of the Olympic sports because to distinguish between superior and inferior among the best players from each countries, the sports should be more difficult, which can make player injurious Among them, I want to choose ice skating sports because of a skate blade. A skate blade is made for speed on the ice. To lower the frictional force, a cross-section touching the ice is very thin, so it is veryvery dangerous. Of course, the players are fine, ordinary person has to be careful. In reality, there was a accident in ice link. One person fell and touched the ground, and his finger was cut off by another.... Everyone should always put safety first in any sport!
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Hi, Jun!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. You really did well! :)
~ T. Camille


In your opinion, what do you think is the most dangerous sport?

>>> I think, the most dangerous sport is one of the Olympic sports because to distinguish between superior and inferior among the best players from each countries, the sports should be more difficult, which can make a player injurious.
>>> I think, the most dangerous sport is one of the Olympic sports because to distinguish between superior and inferior among the best players from each countries, the sports should be more difficult, which can make a player injured.
Among them, I want to choose ice skating sports because of a skate blade. 
>> Among them, I want to choose ice skating as one of the dangerous sports because of the skate blade. 
A skate blade is made for speed on the ice. 
>> CORRECT!
To lower the frictional force, a cross-section touching the ice is very thin, so it is very very dangerous. 
>> CORRECT!
Of course, the players are fine, ordinary person has to be careful. 
>> Of course, the players are fine, but an ordinary person has to be careful. 
In reality, there was a accident in ice link. 
>> In reality, there was an accident in the ice rink. 
One person fell and touched the ground, and his finger was cut off by another....
>> CORRECT!
Everyone should always put safety first in any sport!
>> CORRECT!

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