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이샛별/2024-07-10

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

There are reasons Korea focuses on education. I am going to tell you a reason why Korea focuses so much on education. The first reason is that Korea only has knowledge-based industries since Korea doesn;t have any natural resources to sell. So they sell technology, and they need brain, not muscles. So they only collect people with nice knowledge.

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Thank you for this Daniel!

There are reasons Korea focuses on education.

>>> correct

I am going to tell you a reason why Korea focuses so much on education.
>>> correct

The first reason is that Korea only has knowledge-based industries since Korea doesn't have any natural resources to sell.

>>> correct

So they sell technology, and they need brain, not muscles.

>>> correct

>>> OR: So they sell technology, and they need intellect, not muscles.

So they only collect people with nice knowledge.

>>> OR: So they hone people to be knowledgeable.