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What are your goals and aspirations related to drumming in the future?
박순호/2024-07-10
회원님의 올려주신 영작문
Now that I'm approaching retirement age, I'm thinking about learning an instrument.
I have the expectation that my life will be enriched if I play an instrument in my free time after retirement.
First of all, I plan to learn to play the guitar, which I have dreamed of since college.
I have never been very interested in drums, but I think that if I learn to play guitar, I will naturally come into contact with drums.
Drumming is said to provide an immediate sense of accomplishment through the process of drumming, naturally increases concentration, and is good for relieving stress.
I look forward to learning to play guitar and experiencing drums in the future.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Goodmorning, Sun!
Thank you for doing your homework today. I hope that you'll become a great guitarist someday!
- Kristine ^^
Now that I'm approaching retirement age, I'm thinking about learning an instrument.
>> As I get closer to retirement age, I'm considering learning an instrument.
I have the expectation that my life will be enriched if I play an instrument in my free time after retirement.
I have the expectation that my life will be enriched if I play an instrument in my free time after retirement.
>> If I continue to play an instrument in my spare time after retirement, I believe it will improve my life quality.
First of all, I plan to learn to play the guitar, which I have dreamed of since college.
First of all, I plan to learn to play the guitar, which I have dreamed of since college.
>> I want to start by learning how to play the guitar, something I've wanted to do since college.
I have never been very interested in drums, but I think that if I learn to play guitar, I will naturally come into contact with drums.
I have never been very interested in drums, but I think that if I learn to play guitar, I will naturally come into contact with drums.
>> Although I've never been hooked on drums, I believe that if I learn to play the guitar, I will eventually become interested on it.
Drumming is said to provide an immediate sense of accomplishment through the process of drumming, naturally increases concentration, and is good for relieving stress.
Drumming is said to provide an immediate sense of accomplishment through the process of drumming, naturally increases concentration, and is good for relieving stress.
>> It's been claimed that drumming instantly improves concentration, reduces tension, and gives one an instant sense of success.
I look forward to learning to play guitar and experiencing drums in the future.
I look forward to learning to play guitar and experiencing drums in the future.
>> In the future, I want to experience playing the drums and picking up a guitar.
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