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What do you do when you're not happy?

차유진/2024-07-09

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
When I'm not happy I study. If I study hard, I forget bad feeling. I talk about bed thinks with my mom So I feel better. (T^T)
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hello again, Yale!

Here's your revised homework. Many thanks for sending it. Please take a look at the few revisions like adding comma, and alternative expressions provided, such as "unhappy" which is another word for "not happy". Have a good one!  


Cheers,
Jean~~




                            What do you do when you're not happy?


When I'm not happy I study. 
>> When I'm not happy, I study. 
>> OR: I study when I'm unhappy. 

If I study hard, I forget bad feeling.
>> If I study hard, I forget my bad feelings. 

I talk about bed thinks with my mom So I feel better.
>> I talk with my mom when I go to bed and I feel better afterward. 
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