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What is the purpose of the convention that will be held in Korea?
김명기/2024-07-08
회원님의 올려주신 영작문
We have a big gathering once a year.
Its purpose it to deliver love and encourage each other.
We are happy to meet people who have moved to other provinces.
Especially, I look forward to meeting many Russians who are suffering in their country due to the prohibition command.
The convention will be held for 3 days. The title is "Declare the Good News!"
Friday: We can check the clues that the good news of Jesus in the scriptures is an appropriate book.
We can also hear how the scriptures are useful these days.
Saturday: We will explore the prophecies about Jesus's birth and childhood and see if they have all been fulfilled.
Sunday: Through a public talk titled "Why We Don't Fear Bad News," we will explore why many people can feel peace and confirmation even though today's circumstances are getting worse.
Of course, I expect to be very tired, but my heart will be very happy.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hi, MK!
Wow! That's a full schedule for you! I'm happy that you feel excited about this convention and that you really value and devote time to your faith! Hoping for a very productive convention for your church, and may this convention strengthen your belief.
- T. Caitlyn
We have a big gathering once a year.
>> CORRECT
Its purpose it to deliver love and encourage each other.
Its purpose it to deliver love and encourage each other.
>> CORRECT
We are happy to meet people who have moved to other provinces.
We are happy to meet people who have moved to other provinces.
>> CORRECT
Especially, I look forward to meeting many Russians who are suffering in their country due to the prohibition command.
Especially, I look forward to meeting many Russians who are suffering in their country due to the prohibition command.
>> Especially, I look forward to meeting many Russians who are suffering in their country due to the prohibition commands.
The convention will be held for 3 days. The title is "Declare the Good News!"
The convention will be held for 3 days. The title is "Declare the Good News!"
>> CORRECT
Friday: We can check the clues that the good news of Jesus in the scriptures is an appropriate book.
Friday: We can check the clues that the good news of Jesus in the scriptures is an appropriate book.
>> CORRECT
We can also hear how the scriptures are useful these days.
We can also hear how the scriptures are useful these days.
>> CORRECT
Saturday: We will explore the prophecies about Jesus's birth and childhood and see if they have all been fulfilled.
Saturday: We will explore the prophecies about Jesus's birth and childhood and see if they have all been fulfilled.
>> CORRECT
Sunday: Through a public talk titled "Why We Don't Fear Bad News," we will explore why many people can feel peace and confirmation even though today's circumstances are getting worse.
Sunday: Through a public talk titled "Why We Don't Fear Bad News," we will explore why many people can feel peace and confirmation even though today's circumstances are getting worse.
>> CORRECT
Of course, I expect to be very tired, but my heart will be very happy.
Of course, I expect to be very tired, but my heart will be very happy.
>> CORRECT
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