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What are the advantages and disadvantages of being rich?

이진태/2024-07-08

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

I think that being a rich has more advantages than disadvantages. If we become a rich, we can have a freedom from the money. It's a big advantage for our lives. However, If I were a rich, I would have more pressure and concernes for the life. because rich have too much asset.

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Hey JT! Thank you for taking time to do the homework! I'm glad you were able to share more sentences today!^^ Keep it up!

~~Teacher Ryka^^

I think that being a rich has more advantages than disadvantages.
>> I think that being rich has more advantages than disadvantages.

If we become a rich, we can have a freedom from the money.
>> If we become rich, we can have freedom from money concerns.

It's a big advantage for our lives.
>> CORRECT
>> OR It's a significant benefit for our lives.

However, If I were a rich, I would have more pressure and concernes for the life. because rich have too much asset.
>> However, if I were rich, I would have more pressure and concerns because the rich have too many assets.