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What musical instrument can you play? When did you start learning to play it?

김명기/2024-07-05

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

I can play the violin. I learned it 10 years ago. I took violin lessons for one hour once a week during lunch hour. I didn't practice at home, but after one year, I could play easy songs. However, I stopped learning the violin 5 years ago due to losing interest. I want to learn to play the violin again, but it's not easy to start again. Additionally, the institution fee is more expensive than it was back then. These days, a violin institute opened in front of my house. If my fingers are okay, I will go there.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi, MK!

It's nice to know that you know how to play the violin, but it's also sad to hear that you lost interest five years ago. Hopefully, you can find more time and invest in it again if you really want to learn.

- T. Caitlyn

I can play the violin.

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I learned it 10 years ago.

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I took violin lessons for one hour once a week during lunch hour.

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I didn't practice at home, but after one year, I could play easy songs.

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However, I stopped learning the violin 5 years ago due to losing interest.

>> However, I stopped learning the violin five years ago due to a loss of interest.
I want to learn to play the violin again, but it's not easy to start again.

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Additionally, the institution fee is more expensive than it was back then.

>> Additionally, the tuition fee is more expensive than it was back then.
These days, a violin institute opened in front of my house.

>> Recently, a violin institute opened in front of my house.
If my fingers are okay, I will go there.

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