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심미진/2024-07-05

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if you go to the gym and ride a station bike regually You can lose weight in a short period of time. Excessive dieting is not good for your health. but ,we need to control our diet. n the past, if you excel at one thing, you get a job. But not these days. She is already excell at singing. though, I don't stop trying. I presently like the actor since I fell in love with him in the movie. before i live in studio apartment, i want to be live in there but now is not

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Good evening, Mi Jin!

I'm sending you back your corrected essay. Thank you for sending it. Please go through the correction provided. Speak to you again next week! Good night!

Cheers,
Jean~~

Make sentences using the words and expressions below, including the conjunctions given:

if you go to the gym and ride a station bike regually You can lose weight in a short period of time.

>> If you go to the gym and ride a stationary bike regularly, you can lose weight in a short period of time.

Excessive dieting is not good for your health.

>> CORRECT~~

but ,we need to control our diet.

>> But we still need to control our diet.

n the past, if you excel at one thing, you get a job. But not these days.

>> In the past, you excelled at one thing, you could get a job, but not these days.

She is already excell at singing.

>> She is already excellent at singing.

>> OR: She already excels at singing.

though, I don't stop trying.

>> OR: Though I don't stop trying, I still can't achieve my goal.