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Do you think young children need to have their own gadgets, such as laptops or tablets? Why?

차유진/2024-07-04

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I think children don't need their own gadgets because it is not healthy and bad to balanced development of brain.
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Hello, Yale!

Here's your revised homework. Many thanks for sending it. Please take a look at the few and minor revisions made. Have a good one!  


Cheers,
Jean~~




            Do you think young children need to have their own gadgets, such as laptops or tablets? Why?


I think children don't need their own gadgets because it is not healthy and bad to balanced development of brain.
>> I think children don't need their own gadgets because it is not healthy and bad for the balanced development of the brain.

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