Yeon Hee, 

Excellent work. Keep it up! ^^

-Teacher Ash

Whenever I watch something, I want to eat something delicious.

>>CORRECT

Some knowledgeable person has a lot of pride.

>> A knowledgeable person has a lot of pride.

I feel rewarded when I go to swimming in the morning.

>> I feel rewarded when I go swimming in the morning.

Finance issues should be handled sensitively, even if it is a family relationship.

>> Financial issues should be handled carefully, especially within the family.