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김순님/2024-06-27

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
Time goes by New illness is increasing . The lands,water and air include a lot of chemical material and be polluted. We are breathing and eating such as the environmental place. Our immunity is getting worse so we couldn't resist the disease. That is the reason we have a lot of illness.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hi Ms. Sunny!
Certain factors affect the appearance of new illnesses and it is inevitable due to globalization. What we need to do is to be more cautious and protect ourselves.
have a great day!
T. Aki~

Time goes by New illness is increasing .
>>> Time passes and new illnesses are increasing

The lands,water and air include a lot of chemical material and be polluted.
>>> The land, water, and air contain a lot of polluted chemical materials.

We are breathing and eating such as the environmental place.
>> We are breathing and eating such as the environmental waste.

Our immunity is getting worse so we couldn't resist the disease.
>>> Our immunity is getting worse so we can't resist the disease.

That is the reason we have a lot of illness.
>>> CORRECT!
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