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김영경/2024-06-20

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I used to have a NAVER blog about how Korean can improve English in a short term through my experience to study English for a long time. On the other hand, I might have had a desire to be admired and acknowledged by as many people as possible through my essay on English. I wrote many essays about English whether in Korean or English. Sometimes, I introduced Korean things, such Korean tour attractions or foods in English to people outside Korea to deepen their understanding about Korea. In this regard, English skill has a great tool to communicate with those out of Korea, which might have had been a great dynamism for me to keep studying English for a long time after my graduation from university. From now on, I want to update more about Korea to let foreigners know Korean better and more through my blog.

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Hello, Steve!

That seems like a worthwhile project and an interesting journey! Your blog clearly demonstrates your enthusiasm for both English and Korean culture. Not only can you help others become more fluent in English, but sharing your experiences and views also promotes cross-cultural understanding. It's great that you've decided to concentrate more on introducing Korea to the world, and it will definitely broaden the minds of your readers. Keep up the great work!

~ T. Trixia

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I used to have a NAVER blog about how Korean can improve English in a short term through my experience to study English for a long time.

- I used to have a NAVER blog about how Koreans can improve English in the short term through my experience studying English for a long time.

On the other hand, I might have had a desire to be admired and acknowledged by as many people as possible through my essay on English.

- On the other hand, I might have had a desire to be admired and acknowledged by as many people as possible through my essay in English.

I wrote many essays about English whether in Korean or English.

- I wrote many essays about English, whether in Korean or English.

Sometimes, I introduced Korean things, such Korean tour attractions or foods in English to people outside Korea to deepen their understanding about Korea.

- Sometimes, I introduced Korean things, such as Korean tour attractions or foods, in English to people outside Korea to deepen their understanding of Korea.

In this regard, English skill has a great tool to communicate with those out of Korea, which might have had been a great dynamism for me to keep studying English for a long time after my graduation from university.

- In this regard, my English skill has been a great tool to communicate with those outside of Korea, which might have been a great motivation for me to keep studying English for a long time after my graduation from university.

From now on, I want to update more about Korea to let foreigners know Korean better and more through my blog.

- CORRECT.

>>> From now on, I aim to update my blog more frequently to provide foreigners with a deeper understanding of Korean culture.