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What do you want to do when the weather is too hot.

차진혁/2024-06-20

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I want to swim in the pool because it is very cool. And I want to eat ice-cream because it is very cool and sweet. And I want to turn on the air conditioner and rest a moment because it is comfortable and cool.

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Good afternoon there, Jimmy!

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Cheers,

Jean~~

What do you want to do when the weather is too hot?

I want to swim in the pool because it is very cool.

>> OR: I want to swim in the pool to cool down.

And I want to eat ice-cream because it is very cool and sweet.

>> And I want to eat ice cream because it is cold and sweet.

And I want to turn on the air conditioner and rest a moment because it is comfortable and cool.

>> Also, I want to turn on the air conditioner and rest for a moment because it is comfortable and can help me cool down.