Although parents are responsible for raising a child, outside influence plays a key role in their development. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

I agree that outside influence is important when a child becomes an adult. 

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There are varieties of outside influences.

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One's childhood is influenced by one's neighbors, friends, communities and etc. 

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Parents roll shrink when children go to school.

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They spend more time in school rather than at home.

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 They learn societies through community activities. 

 >>> They learn [from society ] through community activities. 

These lessons cannot be earned through parents.

>>> These lessons cannot be earned [from] parents.

 Children get the concepts about competition and cooperation, outside of a family. 

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 The knowledge from outside is different from children's parents.

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 It is more active, real and diverse.

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 These stimulation encourage children to realize the world and what they are.

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 The outside influence will help child's mature.

 >>>  The outside influence will help the child's [maturity].

One day as a baby bird leave its nest, a child will grow up as an adult and leave their parents. 

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I believe parents roll is becoming a guide when their child choose a direction and prevent from evil.

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OR>>> I believe parents should serve as mentors when their children make choices and safeguard them from harm.