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김순님/2024-06-19

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I want to get a surgery if there isn't any sequela after plastic surgery. I saw many times its after effects from celebrities and neighbors. People who haven't got surgery are getting old pretty and naturally. That's why I hate taking surgery. Some people can get a job and meet partner. Most of all they can be even confident in public.
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Hi Ms. Sunny!
I want to point out what you mentioned in your third sentence that we get old being pretty naturally. 
And on more thing is acceptance of what we have now. I am not saying that it's bad to get surgery but the result is also important. will it satisfy the person? It is ll based on our decision. Have a great day!
Aki~

I want to get a surgery if there isn't any sequela after plastic surgery.
>>> I want to get surgery if there isn't any consequence after plastic surgery.

I saw many times its after-effects from celebrities and neighbors.
>>> I have seen many times its after-effects from celebrities and neighbors.

People who haven't got surgery are getting old pretty and naturally. That's why I hate taking surgery.
>>> People who haven't had surgery are getting old pretty and naturally. That's why I hate taking surgery.

Some people can get a job and meet partner.
>>> Some people can get a job and meet a partner.

Most of all they can be even confident in public.
>> CORRECT!
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