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Some people think that people shouldn't wear animal furs. Do you agree? Why or why not?
박순호/2024-06-18
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It is well known that a famous American actress campaigns against wearing fur.
I can understand the argument for not wearing fur to protect animals.
But I don't agree with that opinion.
Because it denies the food chain relationship on Earth.
Herbivores, such as cows and goats, eat grass, and carnivores, such as lions and wolves, eat herbivores.
Humans are at the top of the food chain and eat grass, grains, and meat.
Humans have been catching animals for a very long time, eating their meat, and making their fur into clothing to withstand the cold.
Telling people not to wear animal fur is as unreasonable as telling people not to eat meat.
I think if people really want to protect animals they should ban hunting just for fun.
Predators such as lions and wolves hunt only when they are hungry.
Humans must learn this.
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Hello there, Sun!
Each year, approximately 100 million animals are killed for their fur. Animals on fur farms spend their entire lives confined to cramped, filthy wire cages. Fur farmers use the cheapest and cruelest killing methods available, including suffocation, electrocution, gas, and poison.
- Kristine ^^
It is well known that a famous American actress campaigns against wearing fur.
>> Correct.
I can understand the argument for not wearing fur to protect animals.
>> Correct.I can understand the argument for not wearing fur to protect animals.
But I don't agree with that opinion.
>> Correct.Because it denies the food chain relationship on Earth.
>> Since it contradicts the Earth's food chain interaction.
Herbivores, such as cows and goats, eat grass, and carnivores, such as lions and wolves, eat herbivores.
Herbivores, such as cows and goats, eat grass, and carnivores, such as lions and wolves, eat herbivores.
>> Correct.
Humans are at the top of the food chain and eat grass, grains, and meat.
Humans are at the top of the food chain and eat grass, grains, and meat.
>> At the top of the food chain, humans consume meat, cereals, and grass.
Humans have been catching animals for a very long time, eating their meat, and making their fur into clothing to withstand the cold.
Humans have been catching animals for a very long time, eating their meat, and making their fur into clothing to withstand the cold.
>> For a very long time, people have been hunting and gathering animals to consume their meat and use their fur to make warm clothing.
Telling people not to wear animal fur is as unreasonable as telling people not to eat meat.
Telling people not to wear animal fur is as unreasonable as telling people not to eat meat.
>> It is just as absurd to advise people not to eat meat as it is to advise them not to wear animal fur.
I think if people really want to protect animals they should ban hunting just for fun.
I think if people really want to protect animals they should ban hunting just for fun.
>> I believe that hunting for pleasure should be outlawed if people genuinely care about saving animals.
Predators such as lions and wolves hunt only when they are hungry.
Predators such as lions and wolves hunt only when they are hungry.
>> Predators that prey mainly during times of hunger includes wolves and lions.
Humans must learn this.
Humans must learn this.
>> People need to understand this.
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