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What are you passionate about?

이진태/2024-06-14

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
I still have a passion for some hobbies eventhough my interest level of those was decreased. I like swimming and playing game and watching TV. I learned swim for few years. I usually went to the swimming pool three times a week. however I can't go swimming pool these days.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hi JT! Thank you for talking about what your most passionate about. I hope to hear more about this in our classes. 
~~Teacher Ryka^^


I still have a passion for some hobbies eventhough my interest level of those was decreased.
>>I still have a passion for some hobbies even though my interest in them has decreased. 

I like swimming and playing game and watching TV. 
>>I like swimming, playing games, and watching TV. 

I learned swim for few years. I usually went to the swimming pool three times a week. 
>>I learned to swim for a few years and usually went to the swimming pool three times a week. 

however I can't go swimming pool these days.
>> However, I can't go to the swimming pool these days.
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