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임성준/2024-06-12

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How would you like to see your culture evolve? What aspects do you believe need improvement, and why? >>> As I told you about korean honorifics, I want unjust social practices to be eliminated. The most serious practice is relationship between senior and junior. This relationships can be easily seen in work. Many seniors thinks, they deserve respects from juniors for only their work term or even age. But I never concede it. If we continue this misuse, we cannnot be advanced country.

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Hello, Brian!

Your insights shed light on a significant cultural aspect that warrants attention. The hierarchical dynamics you mentioned, particularly in the workplace, appear to pose challenges to fostering equality and meritocracy.

Thanks for sharing this. ^^

~ Teacher Maxine

As I told you about korean honorifics, I want unjust social practices to be eliminated.

>> As I mentioned earlier regarding Korean honorifics, I advocate for the elimination of unjust social practices.

The most serious practice is relationship between senior and junior.

>> The most serious issue lies in the relationship between seniors and juniors.

This relationships can be easily seen in work.

>> These relationships are commonly observed in the workplace.

Many seniors thinks, they deserve respects from juniors for only their work term or even age. But I never concede it.

>> Many seniors think they deserve respect from juniors based solely on their tenure or age. However, I do not agree with this perspective.

If we continue this misuse, we cannnot be advanced country.

>> If we persist in this misuse, we cannot become an advanced country.