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How have your customs and traditions changed from when you were younger?

김일환/2024-06-12

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When I was younger, Children went to the neighbour's house to bring cooked rice without the owner's knowledge in first new year's full moon. The house owner already knew that the children will visit to bring cooked rice, so they prepared it. After bringing the cooked rice, they ate it all together. These day, It banned. Children cannot go to the neighbour's house without the owner's knowledge, because the shape of the house was changed. If someone get into a house, the house owner will call a police.

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- Teacher Angela

When I was younger, Children went to the neighbour's house to bring cooked rice without the owner's knowledge in first new year's full moon.

>> When I was younger, children would go to the neighbor's house to bring cooked rice without the owner's knowledge during the first full moon of the new year.

The house owner already knew that the children will visit to bring cooked rice, so they prepared it.

>> The house owner already knew that the children would visit to bring cooked rice, so they were prepared for it.

After bringing the cooked rice, they ate it all together.

>> After bringing the cooked rice, they all ate it together.

These day, It banned.

>> These days, it is banned.

Children cannot go to the neighbour's house without the owner's knowledge, because the shape of the house was changed.

>> Children cannot go to the neighbor's house without the owner's knowledge because the shape of the house has been changed.

If someone get into a house, the house owner will call a police.

>> If someone breaks into a house, the homeowner will call the police.