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김태희/2024-06-10
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How do you think can the government help the young generation and encourage them to get married?
Goverment have to make the system for the economic supporting to young generation.
For the correct and effective support, they have to analyze the core reason of the marriage reduction.
Nowadays, entrance of young people become late more and more.
It means they have a proper position in the society slower than the past.
So, the marriage age become increased naturally.
At the same time, their mendatory requirements also increasing.
Goverment have to understand the situation, and sustainable economic system should be established.
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Hello Nicole,
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corrections given to you. Keep doing that because it would help you a lot to improve faster.
Thank you for your homework.
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T. Jeny
>>correct
Goverment have to make the system for the economic supporting to young generation.
>>The government should make an economic system to support the young generation.
For the correct and effective support, they have to analyze the core reason of the marriage reduction.
For the correct and effective support, they have to analyze the core reason of the marriage reduction.
>>For correct and effective support, they have to analyze the core reason for the reduction of marriages.
Nowadays, entrance of young people become late more and more.
Nowadays, entrance of young people become late more and more.
>>Nowadays, the entrance of young people is becoming more and more late.
It means they have a proper position in the society slower than the past.
It means they have a proper position in the society slower than the past.
>>This means that they have a better position in society than in the past.
So, the marriage age become increased naturally.
So, the marriage age become increased naturally.
>>So they naturally get married late.
At the same time, their mendatory requirements also increasing.
At the same time, their mendatory requirements also increasing.
>>At the same time, their mandatory requirements are also increasing.
Goverment have to understand the situation, and sustainable economic system should be established.
Goverment have to understand the situation, and sustainable economic system should be established.
>>Government has to understand the situation, and a sustainable economic system should be established.
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