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임성준/2024-06-07

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
What is the most unforgettable moment you have shared with your family? >>> I want to tell you about our recent fishing experience. Two weeks ago, We went fishing together and successfully got three fishes. There is not my fish among three fishes. Because I catched ten same inedible fishes. It was Puffer fish. There is strong poison in Its internal organs. So the man who has license about cooking Puffer fish only can cook it. Behind the shameful feeling, I released 10 Puffer fish. Through three fishes my parents had got, We cooked fish stew. It was great!
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hello, Brian! Wow, that sounds like quite an adventure! I'm glad you had a successful fishing trip, despite the unexpected encounter with the pufferfish. It's impressive that you knew how to handle the situation responsibly by releasing them. The fish stew must have been delicious! Thanks for sharing the story with me. ^^
~ Teacher Maxine

I want to tell you about our recent fishing experience. 
>> CORRECT

Two weeks ago, We went fishing together and successfully got three fishes. 
>> Two weeks ago, we went fishing together and successfully caught three fish.

There is not my fish among three fishes. Because I catched ten same inedible fishes. 
>> There were no fish among the three we caught because I caught ten inedible fish.

It was Puffer fish. 
>> It was pufferfish.

There is strong poison in Its internal organs. So the man who has license about cooking Puffer fish only can cook it. 
>> Pufferfish have strong poison in their internal organs, so only someone with a license to cook pufferfish can do so.

Behind the shameful feeling, I released 10 Puffer fish. 
>> Despite feeling ashamed, I released 10 pufferfish

Through three fishes my parents had got, We cooked fish stew. It was great!
>> We cooked fish stew using the three fish my parents had caught. It was great!
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