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Compare and contrast the perspectives on obesity presented in the following statements

안재윤/2024-06-05

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

it actually impairs normal functioning of the body, yes, it is harmful, but considering definition of the disease, it is near to the side effect or original reason of the disease. Because, by itself, it would not generate any pain, and we don't need any medicine to cure this.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hey there, Ms. Anna! Thank you so much for your sharing your point of view regarding this matter.

~T. Jenna

It actually impairs normal functioning of the body, yes, it is harmful,
but considering definition of the disease, it is near to the side effect or original reason of the disease.

>> It actually impairs the normal functioning of the body. Yes, it is harmful, but considering the definition of the disease, it is closely related to either a side effect or the original cause of the disease.

>>It does indeed disrupt normal bodily functions, proving to be harmful. However, when considering the disease's definition, it often appears as either a side effect or an integral component of its origin.
Because, by itself, it would not generate any pain, and we don't need any medicine to cure this.

Correct, or

>>Because, inherently, it does not induce any pain, and thereby doesn't necessitate any medication for its remedy.