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Do you think parents who adopt have the same kind of love for their adopted child as natural parents

이지윤/2024-06-01

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

Of course, I think parents who adopt have the same kind of absolute love that is no different from biological parents have. In Korea, most of the reasons for adoption are because parents want to have their own children but decide when pregnancy is difficult. I think they will raise the adopted child with love because they desperately want a child. Absoultely, they have to go through a tricky process before they adopt, and as a parent, they have to look after themselves to see if they are ready. Sometimes we face tragic crimes like children abuse on the news and on the air. But these are only few incidents and I don't think adoption parents should be blamed for these incidents. Also, the adoption rate of non-newborn children and disabled children is very low, so government and society need to think about it.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, Yun!

I value your honest opinions. After giving it some thought, I realized that it might not always be easy to show both of them equal affection. That being said, I think it is not difficult to love an adopted child as much as your own, particularly if you wait and pray to become parents. :)

Chammy

Of course, I think parents who adopt have the same kind of absolute love that is no different from biological parents have.

In Korea, most of the reasons for adoption are because parents want to have their own children but decide when pregnancy is difficult.

I think they will raise the adopted child with love because they desperately want a child.

>>Correct
Absoultely, they have to go through a tricky process before they adopt, and as a parent, they have to look after themselves to see if they are ready.

>> Absolutely, they have to go through a tricky process before they adopt, and as a parent, they have to look after themselves to see if they are ready.
Sometimes we face tragic crimes like children abuse on the news and on the air.

>>Sometimes we face tragic crimes like children abuse on the news and air.
But these are only few incidents and I don't think adoption parents should be blamed for these incidents.

>>But these are only a few incidents and I don't think adoption parents should be blamed for these incidents.
Also, the adoption rate of non-newborn children and disabled children is very low, so government and society need to think about it.

>>Also, the adoption rate of non-newborn children and disabled children is very low, so the government and society need to think about it.