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The most terrible effect of the war I know is that innocent people die. Because most citizens don't want to go to war. But innocent people die because some selfish people start a war for more land.

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Nicely done, Shin woo! Keep up the great work!

- Teacher Angela

The most terrible effect of the war I know is that innocent people die.

>> The most devastating effect of war, in my opinion, is the loss of innocent lives.

Because most citizens don't want to go to war.

>> CORRECT

But innocent people die because some selfish people start a war for more land.

>> But innocent people die because of some selfish people who start a war to conquer more land.