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~ Writing Task: Please answer the question: Why do you think skin care for men has only recently become popular? In my country, many people think it's very important how I look to others. In other words, it's being conscious of others. Actually, I think this kinds of conscious made a lot of bad culture. That's why there are a severe "Lookism" in Korea. Anyway, recently, not only women, many men are doing skincare. One of the reason is that they want to look handsome to they interested person. Many people said that, when their skin is good condition can they become attractive. Similarly, nowadays for other reasons why many men take care of their skin, the good skin has become a symbol of wealth. As we know, the skincare cost in dermatologist is very expensive. Typically, people who have where jobs they have to meet many people get a lot of skincare.
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Hi, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Why do you think skin care for men has only recently become popular?

In my country, many people think it's very important how I look to others.
>> CORRECT!
In other words, it's being conscious of others.
>> CORRECT!
Actually, I think this kinds of conscious made a lot of bad culture.
>> Actually, I think these kinds of consciousness made a lot of bad culture.
That's why there are a severe "Lookism" in Korea.
>> That's why there's a severe "Lookism" in Korea.
Anyway, recently, not only women, many men are doing skin care.
>> CORRECT!
One of the reason is that they want to look handsome to they interested person.
>> One of the reason is that they want to look handsome for the person they interested in. 
Many people said that, when their skin is good condition can they become attractive.
>> Many people said that, when their skin is in good condition, they can become attractive.
Similarly, nowadays for other reasons why many men take care of their skin, the good skin has become a symbol of wealth.
>> Similarly, nowadays, there are other reasons why many men take care of their skin, because a good skin has become a symbol of wealth.
As we know, the skin care cost in dermatologist is very expensive.
>> As we know, skin care costs an arm and a leg whenever you go to a dermatologist.
Typically, people who have where jobs they have to meet many people get a lot of skincare.
>> Typically, people who have jobs where they need to meet many people get a lot of skin care.