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Many people drink coffee to feel alert. Is there a better way to increase your concentration? How?

김일환/2024-05-27

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
There are no ways to increase my concentration without drinking coffee. Drinking coffee the best way to increase it. Taking a nap is also a good way, but I don't have enough time to take a nap in weekdays. Somebody takes vitamins. High quility vitamins are very expensive. I can get free coffee in my office. My boss drinks a can of Coke every day. The Coke contains lots of sugars. My boss warries of Diabetes, but he can't stop drinking Coke. So, drinking coffee is the best way to increase my concentration. It has the smallest side-effect.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hey Kim Il Hwan! Your explanation about how coffee enhances concentration was excellent. I share your perspective on this topic. Being a coffee lover myself, I see it as a daily ritual rather than just a concentration booster. Great work!
~~Teacher Ryka^^

There are no ways to increase my concentration without drinking coffee. 
>>CORRECT
OR >>I can't increase my concentration without drinking coffee.
Drinking coffee the best way to increase it. 
>>CORRECT
OR >>Drinking coffee is the best way to boost it.
Taking a nap is also a good way, but I don't have enough time to take a nap in weekdays. 
>>Taking a nap is also a good way, but I don't have enough time to nap on weekdays. 
Somebody takes vitamins. 
>>Some people take vitamins. 
High quility vitamins are very expensive. 
>>CORRECT
OR >>Top-notch vitamins can be quite costly.
I can get free coffee in my office. 
>>CORRECT
OR >>I have the option of getting free coffee at my office.
My boss drinks a can of Coke every day. 
>>CORRECT
OR >>My boss indulges in a can of Coke each day.
The Coke contains lots of sugars. 
>>Coke contains lots of sugars.
My boss warries of Diabetes, but he can't stop drinking Coke. 
>>My boss worries about diabetes, but he can't stop drinking Coke. 
So, drinking coffee is the best way to increase my concentration. 
>>CORRECT
OR >>Hence, consuming coffee is the optimal way to improve my focus.
It has the smallest side-effect.
>>CORRECT
OR >> Its side effects are minimal.
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