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한미연/2024-05-26

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

I don't think that we can talk about who is a good parent. Every parent tries to get their children to be happy and successful in the future. So, all parents would be good parents to their children. But if I think about what I try to do to be a good parent, the first important thing is to understand my daughter's feelings or thoughts, and have a discussion about them with her. She is not my small person, so I try to think about her being an individual person not being included in me.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, Ms. Mi Yeon!

You've been constant in your answer to being a mother. I believe it is not easy to be a mom because there is no definitive formula for being the "good one". Also, I understand that everyone has a unique manner of raising their children.

Chammy

I don't think that we can talk about who is a good parent.

>>I don't think we can tell who the good parent is.
Every parent tries to get their children to be happy and successful in the future. So, all parents would be good parents to their children.

>> Every parent tries to get their children to be happy and successful in the future. So, all parents would be good parents to their children.

>>> Every parent tries to ensure their children's future happiness and success. Therefore, all parents strive to be good parents to their children.
But if I think about what I try to do to be a good parent, the first important thing is to understand my daughter's feelings or thoughts and have a discussion about them with her.

>>Correct

She is not my small person, so I try to think about her being an individual person not being included in me. 

>>She is not my small person, so I try to think about her as an individual person not being included in me.

>>She is not my little person, so I make an effort to consider her as another person apart from myself.