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Writing Task: What helps you get to sleep?

이하은/2024-05-25

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

i didn't need. the helps. beacause i'm slept earlly. i'm had so short sleeping time. i went to bd at 12:00 am, but i got. up at 6:00 am so i'm slept only 6 hours but i'm happy because i can do anything better differnt person. i'll study english, ciliming and work at the restrant (my job) everyday. i hope to i have my time for me.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, Haeun! I am relieved that you don't have trouble sleeping. You deserve a longer 'me time' and more sleep for working hard. Take care always!

-T. Sonny

i didn't need. the helps.
>>I don't need any help.
beacause i'm slept earlly.
>>I sleep early.
i'm had so short sleeping time.
>>But, I get insufficient sleep.
i went to bd at 12:00 am, but i got. up at 6:00 am
>>I go to bed at 12:00 am, then get up at 6:00 am.
so i'm slept only 6 hours
>>So, I only sleep for 6 hours.
but i'm happy because i can do anything better differnt person.
>>Nevertheless, I am happy because I can do better things like other people do.
i'll study english, ciliming and work at the restrant (my job) everyday.
>>I study English, do wall climbing and do my job at the restaurant I work for every day.
i hope to i have my time for me.
>>I hope I have more time for myself though.