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양서윤/2024-05-23

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Do you think you have a healthy lifestyle? Why or why not? I think most things are good, but the sleeping cycle is not good. I often sleep after work in the evening for an hour. It makes me sleep at dawn. Nowadays, I am trying not to sleep in the evening. But it is not easy for me.
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Hello, Rachel!

I'm sending you back your corrected homework. Thanks as always for uploading it. Anyway, please take a look at the revisions made, such as alternative expressions or vocabulary. Speak to you in a bit! 


Cheers,
Jean~~




                    Do you think you have a healthy lifestyle? Why or why not?


I think most things are good, but the sleeping cycle is not good.
>> I think my lifestyle is healthy for the most part, but my sleeping habit needs to be improved. 

I often sleep after work in the evening for an hour.
>> OR: I regularly take a nap in the evening for an hour.

It makes me sleep at dawn.
>> However, doing this makes me wake up at dawn. 

Nowadays, I am trying not to sleep in the evening.
>> OR: That's why I'm trying not to take naps after coming home from work. 

But it is not easy for me.
>> OR: But this habit is hard to break. 

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